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Post by Damion / Xerox on Dec 3, 2010 23:04:52 GMT -4
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Post by swoop on Dec 15, 2010 23:17:54 GMT -4
In honesty I found the exposition a little too long. I am not familiar Rengoku. I just found as some annoying thug wanting a fight with Jenny.
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Post by Damion / Xerox on Dec 18, 2010 23:52:35 GMT -4
In honesty I found the exposition a little too long. I am not familiar Rengoku. I just found as some annoying thug wanting a fight with Jenny. The second part will clear things up, and connect the clues together... EDIT: I edited the chapter a bit, and made it a little tighter in the plot development. The beginning exposition is still a little bit long, but i don't feel like it needs to be cut down...
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