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Post by drewmaster on Feb 13, 2011 7:08:21 GMT -4
This is the sequel to my first Mlaatr Story "Frail Humanity." The link to this story can be found here - www.fanfiction.net/s/5626342/1/Mlaatr_Maverick_Hunter_XThis also has profanity. Just letting you know. Also, there is a part 3 that I am working on right now. I will let you know more soon.
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Post by sirtophat on Feb 13, 2011 10:48:38 GMT -4
These are both great. I've read all of Frail Humanity and I'm partway through this one. It's great to see that you're still writing more of this.
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Post by drewmaster on Feb 14, 2011 8:22:58 GMT -4
These are both great. I've read all of Frail Humanity and I'm partway through this one. It's great to see that you're still writing more of this. I plan to keep this story line going for at least a little while longer. The more I write, the more ideas I come up with. It would have to come to an end eventually because then I'd be writing probably for the rest of my life. That's a bit too much.
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Post by sirtophat on Mar 9, 2011 15:59:12 GMT -4
Well, I just finished this. Amazing job you've done with these. It really feels like a continuation of the show for me that's allowed to escape the Nickelodeon limitations.
Is the next one going to be more lighthearted, maybe exploring the Jenny/Sheldon further? That's what I'm hoping for 8)
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Post by jennylxj9 on Mar 10, 2011 2:41:59 GMT -4
Waits for a flash or a game of mlaatr.
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Post by sirtophat on Mar 10, 2011 7:37:28 GMT -4
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Post by drewmaster on Mar 10, 2011 20:20:49 GMT -4
Well, I just finished this. Amazing job you've done with these. It really feels like a continuation of the show for me that's allowed to escape the Nickelodeon limitations. Is the next one going to be more lighthearted, maybe exploring the Jenny/Sheldon further? That's what I'm hoping for 8) I'm glad you like it. It's true that the continuation aspect of my story is exactly what I was aiming at. Escaping Nickelodeon's limitations is an issue I felt I had to explore. If I told these two fanfics from those limitations, I don't think I could stand writing them. I obviously, from you've read, see this story from a very serious perspective. My Life as a Teenage Robot is not really a kids show to me. A kids show to me is something like "Barney and Friends" or "Dora the Explorer." I can't take stories like those seriously because I can't relate to them at all. In real life, I see someone like Jenny being treated, honestly, worse than in my stories. People are ruthless to each other, imagine a robot suddenly entering your classroom. Yeah......exactly. I can't take most so-called kids shows as actually being kiddy anymore. I can't treat them lightly at all. I actually listen to everything the characters say and watch everything they do, and you know what I realize, these are shows for kids, but.......they are clearly not made by kids. They are made by adults who actually understand the real world. That's the truth. If you think I'm wrong, imagine a seven-year-old producing My Life as a Teenage Robot or maybe even Dragonball Z. The quality of the shows would be so abysmal. On the note of observing and thoroughly analyzing everything that's said and done around me is concerned, I do that with the news as well. Those politicians are so inconsistent and I wonder why most people around me don't seem to notice. But I'm not going too deep into politics right now. I'm not trying make anyone flame me. The the thing is......take the old Super Mario Bros. 3 cartoon show from the early 90s for example. In one episode, Bowser says something about being capitalistic. Okay. Capitalism, huh? Really? What kid understands capitalism? I don't know that child. Show this kid to me Nintendo. Since you can't, why did you mention capitalism, Nintendo? Also, in the same show, different episode, Luigi and the princess were kidnapped by this wizard guy. The princess asks him why he's doing this to them, and he actually says "I don't need a reason to be mean and nasty. That's just the way I am." I reacted like "What the......? That's a concept that is actually quite difficult for most adults to fully understand because it doesn't really even make realistic sense. How do they actually expect a kid to even begin to understand that." Those weren't my exact words, but I think you get the point. Cartoons all across the board are like that. Looney Toons was supposedly meant for kids, but Bugs Bunny would often dress like a girl and kiss men. No wonder we have so many gay young people. Yosemite Sam would often bust up into a room unnanounced and just start screaming and shooting everywhere. In real life, that's a sure way to start a war. No wonder kids today are so violent. These are only a few of probably thousands of examples I could give that would describe to you the way I see things. These things help me write these fanfics the way I do. I can see and point out a very dark side to some of the kiddiest shows out there if I sat beside you and we watched shows together. In a few days time, I could point out many crazy things about shows more than 99% (to my knowledge) of people never point out. Edit: Oh yeah, I almost forgot about it. Lighthearted stories aren't usually my style, but I suppose I could try it. The next story is still quite heart wrenching like the first two, but my the one following that will be more lighthearted. I do want to explore the character's relationships more.
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Post by drewmaster on Mar 10, 2011 20:30:07 GMT -4
If you can make a Mlaatr game, I say go for it.
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Post by sirtophat on Mar 11, 2011 8:24:53 GMT -4
Well, I just finished this. Amazing job you've done with these. It really feels like a continuation of the show for me that's allowed to escape the Nickelodeon limitations. Is the next one going to be more lighthearted, maybe exploring the Jenny/Sheldon further? That's what I'm hoping for 8) I'm glad you like it. It's true that the continuation aspect of my story is exactly what I was aiming at. Escaping Nickelodeon's limitations is an issue I felt I had to explore. If I told these two fanfics from those limitations, I don't think I could stand writing them. I obviously, from you've read, see this story from a very serious perspective. My Life as a Teenage Robot is not really a kids show to me. A kids show to me is something like "Barney and Friends" or "Dora the Explorer." I can't take stories like those seriously because I can't relate to them at all. In real life, I see someone like Jenny being treated, honestly, worse than in my stories. People are ruthless to each other, imagine a robot suddenly entering your classroom. Yeah......exactly. I can't take most so-called kids shows as actually being kiddy anymore. I can't treat them lightly at all. I actually listen to everything the characters say and watch everything they do, and you know what I realize, these are shows for kids, but.......they are clearly not made by kids. They are made by adults who actually understand the real world. That's the truth. If you think I'm wrong, imagine a seven-year-old producing My Life as a Teenage Robot or maybe even Dragonball Z. The quality of the shows would be so abysmal. On the note of observing and thoroughly analyzing everything that's said and done around me is concerned, I do that with the news as well. Those politicians are so inconsistent and I wonder why most people around me don't seem to notice. But I'm not going too deep into politics right now. I'm not trying make anyone flame me. The the thing is......take the old Super Mario Bros. 3 cartoon show from the early 90s for example. In one episode, Bowser says something about being capitalistic. Okay. Capitalism, huh? Really? What kid understands capitalism? I don't know that child. Show this kid to me Nintendo. Since you can't, why did you mention capitalism, Nintendo? Also, in the same show, different episode, Luigi and the princess were kidnapped by this wizard guy. The princess asks him why he's doing this to them, and he actually says "I don't need a reason to be mean and nasty. That's just the way I am." I reacted like "What the......? That's a concept that is actually quite difficult for most adults to fully understand because it doesn't really even make realistic sense. How do they actually expect a kid to even begin to understand that." Those weren't my exact words, but I think you get the point. Cartoons all across the board are like that. Looney Toons was supposedly meant for kids, but Bugs Bunny would often dress like a girl and kiss men. No wonder we have so many gay young people. Yosemite Sam would often bust up into a room unnanounced and just start screaming and shooting everywhere. In real life, that's a sure way to start a war. No wonder kids today are so violent. These are only a few of probably thousands of examples I could give that would describe to you the way I see things. These things help me write these fanfics the way I do. I can see and point out a very dark side to some of the kiddiest shows out there if I sat beside you and we watched shows together. In a few days time, I could point out many crazy things about shows more than 99% (to my knowledge) of people never point out. Edit: Oh yeah, I almost forgot about it. Lighthearted stories aren't usually my style, but I suppose I could try it. The next story is still quite heart wrenching like the first two, but my the one following that will be more lighthearted. I do want to explore the character's relationships more. Very interesting. I didn't mean for the whole thing to be lighthearted, I just meant a bit less tense for a few chapters or so. I just want to see Jenny/Sheldon have some good times together before all of the other stuff takes place, or maybe after.
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Post by sirtophat on Mar 11, 2011 15:47:08 GMT -4
I'm glad you like it. It's true that the continuation aspect of my story is exactly what I was aiming at. Escaping Nickelodeon's limitations is an issue I felt I had to explore. If I told these two fanfics from those limitations, I don't think I could stand writing them. I obviously, from you've read, see this story from a very serious perspective. My Life as a Teenage Robot is not really a kids show to me. A kids show to me is something like "Barney and Friends" or "Dora the Explorer." I can't take stories like those seriously because I can't relate to them at all. In real life, I see someone like Jenny being treated, honestly, worse than in my stories. People are ruthless to each other, imagine a robot suddenly entering your classroom. Yeah......exactly. I can't take most so-called kids shows as actually being kiddy anymore. I can't treat them lightly at all. I actually listen to everything the characters say and watch everything they do, and you know what I realize, these are shows for kids, but.......they are clearly not made by kids. They are made by adults who actually understand the real world. That's the truth. If you think I'm wrong, imagine a seven-year-old producing My Life as a Teenage Robot or maybe even Dragonball Z. The quality of the shows would be so abysmal. On the note of observing and thoroughly analyzing everything that's said and done around me is concerned, I do that with the news as well. Those politicians are so inconsistent and I wonder why most people around me don't seem to notice. But I'm not going too deep into politics right now. I'm not trying make anyone flame me. The the thing is......take the old Super Mario Bros. 3 cartoon show from the early 90s for example. In one episode, Bowser says something about being capitalistic. Okay. Capitalism, huh? Really? What kid understands capitalism? I don't know that child. Show this kid to me Nintendo. Since you can't, why did you mention capitalism, Nintendo? Also, in the same show, different episode, Luigi and the princess were kidnapped by this wizard guy. The princess asks him why he's doing this to them, and he actually says "I don't need a reason to be mean and nasty. That's just the way I am." I reacted like "What the......? That's a concept that is actually quite difficult for most adults to fully understand because it doesn't really even make realistic sense. How do they actually expect a kid to even begin to understand that." Those weren't my exact words, but I think you get the point. Cartoons all across the board are like that. Looney Toons was supposedly meant for kids, but Bugs Bunny would often dress like a girl and kiss men. No wonder we have so many gay young people. Yosemite Sam would often bust up into a room unnanounced and just start screaming and shooting everywhere. In real life, that's a sure way to start a war. No wonder kids today are so violent. These are only a few of probably thousands of examples I could give that would describe to you the way I see things. These things help me write these fanfics the way I do. I can see and point out a very dark side to some of the kiddiest shows out there if I sat beside you and we watched shows together. In a few days time, I could point out many crazy things about shows more than 99% (to my knowledge) of people never point out. Edit: Oh yeah, I almost forgot about it. Lighthearted stories aren't usually my style, but I suppose I could try it. The next story is still quite heart wrenching like the first two, but my the one following that will be more lighthearted. I do want to explore the character's relationships more. Very interesting. I didn't mean for the whole thing to be lighthearted, I just meant a bit less tense for a few chapters or so. I just want to see Jenny/Sheldon have some good times together before all of the other stuff takes place, or maybe after. After what happened in the last one, it would be hard to make a bigger conflict of outsiders. Maybe the next one will be mostly problems between the good characters?
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Post by drewmaster on Mar 12, 2011 17:12:18 GMT -4
It's not a bad idea at all though. I think I should try that. I need some more practice with general romance and ordinary life stuff in my stories. Thanks for the idea.
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Post by drewmaster on Mar 12, 2011 17:20:12 GMT -4
It would be hard to make a bigger conflict of outsiders? Not necessarily. I understand one thing about conflict. Just when you think things can't get worse, they might just will. You might get lucky, but other people go through terrible tragic situations all the time with no conceivable end in sight. Story-wise though, I've already though of quite a few more scenarios to explore, but a story with problems between the good characters would be interesting.
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Post by sirtophat on Mar 12, 2011 20:13:06 GMT -4
It would be hard to make a bigger conflict of outsiders? Not necessarily. I understand one thing about conflict. Just when you think things can't get worse, they might just will. You might get lucky, but other people go through terrible tragic situations all the time with no conceivable end in sight. Story-wise though, I've already though of quite a few more scenarios to explore, but a story with problems between the good characters would be interesting. The conflict of the last one was pretty huge, all of Earth almost being destroyed again. Going bigger with that just seems a bit of a stretch. I'm sure you could, but more of the same just getting bigger would lose its impact, variety keeps it interesting. Spoilers are ahead for people who haven't read it. A bit unrelated to all of that, it sortof bugged me that Jenny did something as stupid as firing herself into the big guy at the end. (Sorry I can't remember his name) I thought she'd learned better by then. Also, in general, it seems like you make the characters waste too much time talking in the middle of fights. The TV show did this too, but I just don't understand why they'd waste time exchanging pointless banter when they're trying to kill eachother. Aside from the small issues there, I thought it was cool how you hung a lampshade on how the end was like a videogame. (If you're not familiar with that, it's here at TVTropes tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/LampshadeHanging -- A great place to see how stories work. They say that it's useful for writers. A trope is a recurring theme in storytelling media, such as lampshade hanging which is calling attention to something being unrealistic so the audience knows the characters notice it's weird too)
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